Friday, September 23, 2011

THE REVIEW

SUMMER’S OVER


Fall has arrived and so did the rain. Time to cocoon and do some writing. Anne, Jason, Jim and Bob were all here with me Wednesday night to honour the Muse.

Anne read first, continuing her story about the sisters of Ruth and Ida. The two women go out for dinner, to the Spaghetti Factory and Ida takes her own grape juice. She is obviously a regular as the staff all know her and smile ‘supportively’ at Ruth. Ida asks why Ruth has bothered to come and see her and Ruth tells her she discovered Ida is being sued by a Strata Council. This is well done with the dialogue between the two sisters really showcasing the spit and scratch of sibling relationships. And background information given with Ruth flashing back to a previous time enhances the difficulties of being related to someone who is bi-polar.

Jason read his next chapter called “Discovered”. We see the evil Damianos and the siren, Ligeia, stalking Jo, who arrives home from her date with Sean. Sean attacks her and tears her top, but then stops when seeing something on her back. Gregg arrives and his presence stops Damianos from grabbing Jo. Jo tells Gregg she doesn’t need him to protect her, that she can take care of herself. Looking into the bush, Gregg locks eyes with Damianos, and the latter knows Jo is the benighted child because of Gregg’s desire to protect her. This was a very well-done chapter with lots of tension in it.

Jim read Chapter 7, still at Olivia’s thirteenth birthday at the coffee shop. Leanne and the other ghosts, with the help of Piovra, performed a type of light show for Olivia and the other guests. One of those present was Shen, a student from Olivia’s school, who wanted to meet the pretty girl. Olivia’s father pointed him out to her and then regretted that when he saw Olivia smiling at the boy. But Sara, the kitten, intervened by giving Shen a ghostly ‘scratch’, which spurred him to talk to Olivia. He ended up being invited to Sunday dinner at Olivia’s home.

I read Margaret’s next chapter in “Coffin And Dye”, which was “Dye Telephones Coffin”. Dye phones Coffin to tell him he’s going away for a week with Lizzie Farmer and Coffin is scandalized. Dye is offended that Coffin thinks so little of Lizzie, and he defends her. Tootsie goes shopping for something to wear when she marries Coffin. Trish tries to talk her into a spring wedding but Tootsie doesn’t want to wait that long. She ends up buying a black suit with a red shawl, a red purse, and a red hat with three tall black feathers. Coffin still doesn’t know he’s getting married.

I re-wrote “Nigel Wingate Is Dead”, putting the third chapter first, and modifying the other two chapters to follow. These I read and everyone said it read well in that order. I had found it easier to add to it as well. So now we have Nigel driving to Watch Lake and Dee telling him she murdered her child in the first chapter. The next chapter is Edna’s point of view, relating the afternoon’s events and giving background info. The third chapter now is Nigel’s point of view, telling how he met Dee and what had been going on with her and Hank. It then shows Nigel at the cabin, alone in the hide-a-bed, when Dee slips in with him during the night.

Jim said he was feeling better, more clear-headed, but is still waiting for surgery. We hope this happens soon for him. Ellie was busy writing for an online course she’s taking and waiting for her husband to come home for supper. Margaret Fluorczak was going to check out a group in Maple Ridge. And Gemma said she was helping her brother with a move.

Next Meeting will be Wednesday, Oct. 5th at 7:00 p.m. here at my place. Look forward to seeing you then. Happy Writing!!!

Lisa

No comments: